this is my creative writing http://www.pobble365.com/ helped me get some ideas for my story 

comment on what i could improve on and i think i could explain how the aliens got there in the first place 

my moment in time writing

so we had to chose a picture and say what is happening, at that time. what we would feel in that picture, like what we smell here wonder and see.

comment on something i could in prove on in my writing. i personally think i could have a better start on the story. the picture that i did for this writing is up at the top